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Let me call this love, hope, and trust.

The end of all we thought would come true,

A perfect world with you;

The exile of my dreams.

You once made me a promise,

A few meaningless words strung together you used,

Tighter than a bow string;

To grasp my heart and tear it apart.

On desolate cold nights… I realize what those beautiful words hold.

I now know there is no such thing as love.

In my heart I’m falling for you head over heels,

In my head I’m walking away.

I know our love will last forever, for an eternity…

Except our love never began…

I just wish that you would have held me… just once.

…I am not that lucky, not that special; not that unique as to hold your love.

I don’t have you here with me.

In truth, you’ve never been here.

Oh how I love you, my life is yours, forever, no matter where you are.

I’ve become a simple rag doll for you to throw to a pack of wolves.

Do with it what you will, I trust you enough to keep it intact.

The teeth marks in my skin take longer to heal than a clean wound.

Keep my love, my trust…myself, safe within your arms.

If I had one last day on Earth, an end to a life ravaged by sorrow,

All I could ask for…would be for you to be with me; kissing me, loving me as no
other can.

All I could ask for… would be to see your cooling flesh on the ground.

Oh my shadow, do not leave me to a place I cannot find you;

Where I cannot seek my revenge.

I wouldn’t be able to bear it, seeing you like that… my strength would be gone.

Please is all I can ask, stay and let me treat you as I’ve been treated.

I can dream and hope for the rest of my life

And I could still pass you by…

I cannot live without you; I won’t live without you…

But I Can... and I Can’t…

So I sit here in thought, wondering which one of your two sides… is truly you.
So basically I'm confused. Yes it happens to the best of us. I'm guessing he's the latter... you can read this through or you can read every other line. One's happy, the other tone is angry. *shrugs* I'm getting over it, I survive.
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This is a beautiful poem, Luna.

The poem's ability to be read both as a continuous piece or as two separate parts by reading every other line was not something I noticed until you pointed it out, but it was well and cleverly done. The symbolism of such a potential was also very interesting - it reminds the reader of the conflicting emotions, either one of which could consume the soul, but which together can tear it in half. Your word choice, as always, is lovely.

I believe my favorite part of the piece is the contrasting set of lines "I know our love will last forever, for an eternity.../Except our love never began..." Out of all the others, I think that best exemplifies the theme of a love ignored and crushed. Also, wondering which half is the real person definitely spoke to me - probably to everyone else as well, we've all been there before.

A beautiful piece - very sad and emotional, but very beautiful.
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Doomguy83 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Student Artist
Wow this sums up my feelings for this girl i knew, wow we were really hitting of well, but when school ended together i never heard from her again. *sigh* I still think about her to this day.
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LunasKiss Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I still think about who this was written for as well... It's difficult to let go of those we love and lose touch with.
I'm glad I'm not the only one with these emotions.
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Doomguy83 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Student Artist
There are people who share you same feelings all you need to do is search.
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LunasKiss Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Too bad you can make mistakes while searching
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Aikurisu Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009
Beautiful, tragic and intense. Those three words lept to mind as I considered what was said after reading it in full. And normally I don't have a good mind for poetry, (I know, some would say otherwise, but meh... ) but this spoke in a way that made me follow it keenly. It certainly shows you have a knack for writing and the emotion involved was vivid enough that you could feel it and that it was anything but shallow. It's a writing from the soul, and to me it gives it a flow you wouldn't find elsewhere in the mind.

The 'light and dark' union between the lines also struck me as a fine way of delivering this piece. It also helped futher create something one could visualise emotionally and define the conflict within.
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LunasKiss Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you could feel the emotion in it. I guess it did just slip out of my soul as I was writing it. When I look back now though it's as though I wasn't the author. It's quite strange but that feeling I had is gone. I suppose I've made up my mind deep down under the surface.
I love to write ^^; and if i can feel the emotion of it within myself I can express it through my writings. I have to be careful about my mood when I'm writing an essay for school sometimes.
*shrugs and smiles* The light and dark theme has always been a strong theme for me. there has to be balance somewhere and why not make it a pure balance rather than a diluted one? I'm glad you were able to visualize it... I write a lot but I don't show most of it because I'm afraid it will only make sense to me and confuse others. Perhaps at some point I'll post more.
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Aikurisu Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2009
Well, hopefully I'll be able to read them. Seeing what you can write makes me look even more forward too to what we can think of and put together for lore, RP and such. =)

I find that a writing without feeling is missing an important point to what can make it readable. It's virtually the same way with my visual art as well. If I can't feel anything from it, or to a lesser extent learn from it, it's simply not worth investing my time with. So it's a dangerous mix if I'm drawing something I have no heart for, because it has a probability of hurting my interest in drawing art in general. That's why I'm very picky when it comes to selecting commissions. If I know it'll deplete me in some way I just avoid them. Remember this one guy who wanted me to draw some pretty lowbrow stuff, and I'm glad it's never gone anywhere past his interest in commissioning me.

Ah... anyhoo, I agree about finding a balance. And I'm sure if people have good visualising skill, they'll be able to make sense of what you write. But when it comes to people without any real imagination...
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LunasKiss Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
If I ever get up the courage to show them perhaps you will get to read through them. ^^; Well I'm glad for that! At least you don't think I'm a bad writer :D My poetry tends to be rough and I don't like it as much as some of the other things I've written so we'll see.

It really is. If you can't feel something for it how can the reader possibly feel something for it? Or the viewer for that matter. If you're going to spend time doing something, it better be worth something to you. Commissions would be hard to do unless you got to know what you were drawing or f it had a specific purpose or something... At least we have the power to say no to things like that. =)

Hah, yeah it does take a bit of imagination and visualization to get some things. Heck sometimes after I've written something it makes no sense to me unless I look back at what was happening when I wrote it on the spot. hehe
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Aikurisu Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2009
lol, well I like your poetry. Mayhap I'll give you the honours of writing a few that bards play in the regions of Raleigh and Savaremos, based on some of those ancient myths you only know so little about for now? =)

Yeah, I often try to bring some kind of meaning to my works. And if I can't do it visually, that's what the lengthy lore descriptions are for. =P

I tend I need to write down a lot of things and in great detail to remind myself of certain instances and how they are meant to flow. Like the feelings I may have had that gave birth to certain ideas might be gone a year later, or two. So when ie comes to trying to unearth those ideas after so long and understand the main point of view associated with them... yeah. It's a bit the same with visual art too. If you forget the technique or evolved from it, chances are trying to go back to something you drew years ago might be a bad thing...
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LunasKiss Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad, I guess I'm one of those people that don't like their own work...now that would be fun! I'd really like to do something like that...As soon as I have more information perhaps I will. ^^

Meaning is important and I love digging into descriptions...and looking at them visually...=)

I can understand that one. It's difficult to just pick something up and try to start working on it again. heh I started writing a short story a few years back so I was pretty little and I reread it recently...wow, so many mistakes and grammar issues and it was just horrid, at the time I thought it was a masterpiece but...It takes some work to bring ideas to date...
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