So basically I'm confused. Yes it happens to the best of us. I'm guessing he's the latter... you can read this through or you can read every other line. One's happy, the other tone is angry. *shrugs* I'm getting over it, I survive.
The poem's ability to be read both as a continuous piece or as two separate parts by reading every other line was not something I noticed until you pointed it out, but it was well and cleverly done. The symbolism of such a potential was also very interesting - it reminds the reader of the conflicting emotions, either one of which could consume the soul, but which together can tear it in half. Your word choice, as always, is lovely.
I believe my favorite part of the piece is the contrasting set of lines "I know our love will last forever, for an eternity.../Except our love never began..." Out of all the others, I think that best exemplifies the theme of a love ignored and crushed. Also, wondering which half is the real person definitely spoke to me - probably to everyone else as well, we've all been there before.
A beautiful piece - very sad and emotional, but very beautiful.
Beautiful, tragic and intense. Those three words lept to mind as I considered what was said after reading it in full. And normally I don't have a good mind for poetry, (I know, some would say otherwise, but meh... ) but this spoke in a way that made me follow it keenly. It certainly shows you have a knack for writing and the emotion involved was vivid enough that you could feel it and that it was anything but shallow. It's a writing from the soul, and to me it gives it a flow you wouldn't find elsewhere in the mind.
The 'light and dark' union between the lines also struck me as a fine way of delivering this piece. It also helped futher create something one could visualise emotionally and define the conflict within.
I'm glad you could feel the emotion in it. I guess it did just slip out of my soul as I was writing it. When I look back now though it's as though I wasn't the author. It's quite strange but that feeling I had is gone. I suppose I've made up my mind deep down under the surface. I love to write and if i can feel the emotion of it within myself I can express it through my writings. I have to be careful about my mood when I'm writing an essay for school sometimes. *shrugs and smiles* The light and dark theme has always been a strong theme for me. there has to be balance somewhere and why not make it a pure balance rather than a diluted one? I'm glad you were able to visualize it... I write a lot but I don't show most of it because I'm afraid it will only make sense to me and confuse others. Perhaps at some point I'll post more.
Well, hopefully I'll be able to read them. Seeing what you can write makes me look even more forward too to what we can think of and put together for lore, RP and such.
I find that a writing without feeling is missing an important point to what can make it readable. It's virtually the same way with my visual art as well. If I can't feel anything from it, or to a lesser extent learn from it, it's simply not worth investing my time with. So it's a dangerous mix if I'm drawing something I have no heart for, because it has a probability of hurting my interest in drawing art in general. That's why I'm very picky when it comes to selecting commissions. If I know it'll deplete me in some way I just avoid them. Remember this one guy who wanted me to draw some pretty lowbrow stuff, and I'm glad it's never gone anywhere past his interest in commissioning me.
Ah... anyhoo, I agree about finding a balance. And I'm sure if people have good visualising skill, they'll be able to make sense of what you write. But when it comes to people without any real imagination...
If I ever get up the courage to show them perhaps you will get to read through them. Well I'm glad for that! At least you don't think I'm a bad writer My poetry tends to be rough and I don't like it as much as some of the other things I've written so we'll see.
It really is. If you can't feel something for it how can the reader possibly feel something for it? Or the viewer for that matter. If you're going to spend time doing something, it better be worth something to you. Commissions would be hard to do unless you got to know what you were drawing or f it had a specific purpose or something... At least we have the power to say no to things like that.
Hah, yeah it does take a bit of imagination and visualization to get some things. Heck sometimes after I've written something it makes no sense to me unless I look back at what was happening when I wrote it on the spot. hehe
lol, well I like your poetry. Mayhap I'll give you the honours of writing a few that bards play in the regions of Raleigh and Savaremos, based on some of those ancient myths you only know so little about for now?
Yeah, I often try to bring some kind of meaning to my works. And if I can't do it visually, that's what the lengthy lore descriptions are for.
I tend I need to write down a lot of things and in great detail to remind myself of certain instances and how they are meant to flow. Like the feelings I may have had that gave birth to certain ideas might be gone a year later, or two. So when ie comes to trying to unearth those ideas after so long and understand the main point of view associated with them... yeah. It's a bit the same with visual art too. If you forget the technique or evolved from it, chances are trying to go back to something you drew years ago might be a bad thing...
I'm glad, I guess I'm one of those people that don't like their own work...now that would be fun! I'd really like to do something like that...As soon as I have more information perhaps I will. ^^
Meaning is important and I love digging into descriptions...and looking at them visually...
I can understand that one. It's difficult to just pick something up and try to start working on it again. heh I started writing a short story a few years back so I was pretty little and I reread it recently...wow, so many mistakes and grammar issues and it was just horrid, at the time I thought it was a masterpiece but...It takes some work to bring ideas to date...
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